Pass the Drabble Part 6
It was almost Christmas and Tommy's mother became nostalgic. It wasn't really her fault, she wasn't much on holidays. Someone had left her a large tip at the 24 hour diner and told her to be Merry. With swollen ankles and an arthritic hobble, she slumped at the bus stop when a taxi stopped and offered her a free lift, which she flatly refused. There were Christmas envelopes in the mail which she discarded . There were no longer any pictures of Tommy in her flat. To the extent of her knowledge, she was
childless and had always been so.
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Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
Nice one, D.M.! You've taken it off on a slight tangent, adding dimension to the story and it will be fascinating to see who reconnects with the occult and how it's done. Your last line is a good setup for some weird goings on! :)
(Btw, while you were away I finally followed up your suggestion for one of my much earlier drabbles - writing it from another PoV. I'd be interested if you think I've managed to improve the original ("No more lessons") with "Use it, don't lose it". Honest feedback would be appreciated. Thanks.)
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D.M. over 8 years ago
Thank you, Neville. I owe this to Drew, who is so good at jumping the story forwards and back, with various characters adding new elements to the plot.
( I've got some catching up to do, as always when one is away.
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Ricky Moore over 8 years ago
I love the extra layers that have been added here. I hope this continues to grow and am excited to see what little bits others can add to this ongoing story as well. Everyone has their own unique styles that they bring to the table which makes it all the more fun!
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Iarwain Olofsson over 8 years ago
How does it work?
Are you expecting us to add drabbles telling stories in a similar context? I am a bit lost. Care enlightening me?
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Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
Hi Iarwain. It's a progressive story - as a kid, in the UK we called it 'Consequences' - it comprises separate 100 word chapters written by different people so the different storytellers add to the story whatever way s/he sees fit. It's 'co-created' and that's the fun, because you never know quite where it will go. It was Christopher's (@shapeshifter) idea and you should look at the 'rules' he set, which are very sensible. Try also to include the 'provenance' of each chapter so those joining later can catch up. Hope to read a chapter or two from you!
