Jake Randolph in "The Eternal Night" Pt. 1
I stood there staring down the barrel. There were multiple targets, all in motion. Sweat was dripping off my forehead and into my eyes. But I was being counted on to complete this mission. And I wasn't about to fall short.
I steadied myself and pulled the trigger. The first target dropped. I continued until all the targets were down. Every last duck.
"Very good, mister, you won the lady a kewpie doll!" the man said as he reached behind himself and got an ugly little doll off the shelf and handed it to my companion.
"Oh, Jake, it's lovely!"
- Category: Crime, Murder & Mystery
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Christopher almost 3 years ago
Well, here it is. Lucky number 7 for Jake. I'm right in the middle of writing this so I'm stepping out on a limb by starting to post it. But i need the pressure to make me actually finish it.
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Neville Hunt almost 3 years ago
Bravo! It’s a lovely start, Jake, but methinks it ain’t gonna be so lovely real soon. Hope his companion ain’t hurt in whatever shenanigans are coming your way🤞
Bravo Christopher too. Hopefully this is also going to kickstart me into action on you know what!🤞
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Frenchie almost 3 years ago
Great and so, so nice! I loved the description of Jake looking down at the barrel. Obviously, being sometimes totally unimaginative, I first thought of something more sinister 😎😉
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firefly almost 3 years ago
I love how you built up the tension, Christopher. And it's very funny too!
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Christopher almost 3 years ago
Thanks, everyone. I hope you enjoy it.
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Rachel Bee almost 3 years ago
Oooh this has great potential, going to try not to binge!!
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Neville Hunt almost 3 years ago
Bingeing is cool, Rachel... don’t feel guilty about it.
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Christopher almost 3 years ago
Thanks, Rachel.
