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Beyond The Valley #4

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Abrams shook his head, "Why would the mob go after some two-bit ventriloquist in a four-bit nightclub? There's something more sinister here."

Jacobs pointed to a doll, "Look, him. That's Chucko. Rosie, the manager, said that's the one he was using last night."

Abrams looked at it. It seemed to be staring right into Abrams' soul.

"Maybe Chucko did this, huh, Abrams?" Jacobs said, laughing.

Abrams didn't tell Jacobs that, as they were leaving the dressing room to interview a few of the club's employees, he looked back at Chucko and would've sworn the doll winked at him.

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    Christopher 10 months ago

    Well, that's it. The implication is that the dolls killed Danvers, but I realize now after I read all four of them that that wasn't a very satisfying read. I'm working on a story right now, but maybe I can revisit this some time in the future. I like the idea, I just don't know if the paranormal is up my street. It's okay for short drabbles but I don't know if I could do it as a series.

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    Neville Hunt 10 months ago

    Don’t do yourself down Christopher. This is good stuff. I really like the idea behind these anthropomorphic dummies and how you’re developing the characters of the two cops. I think this could develop really well, maybe with one of the cops drawn to come back on his own to check out his niggling suspicions that there is more to the dolls than meet their creepy eyes. I really like Chucko. The detective could try him out, sit him on his knee. The doll could answer, unaided and there could be banter and clues in the banter etc etc etc. A load of potential if you wanted. Crossing fingers here🤞

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    Christopher 10 months ago

    Thanks, Neville. I've had this on my mind ever since I jotted it down. I was actually contemplating a series based on this when I wrote the first stand-alone drabble. It might be an interesting story to tell. I'll ponder it.

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    Drew Martyn 10 months ago

    Brilliant! I agree with Neville, this mini-series is spot-on and I don't think the ending is unsatisfying at all. For me, it has all the hallmarks of something out of Weird Tales or The Dark Side. I could imagine a writer like Ray Bradbury or, more recently, Thomas Ligotti coming up with this. It's a great idea with a lot of potential, so when you feel ready to revisit, go for it! :) In the meantime, this is a superb set of drabbles.

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    Christopher 10 months ago

    Thanks, Drew! I might expand on it in the future. I'm still trying to get back into the groove of things after my surgeries.

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