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My 10 year old granddaughter has a passion. She’s a synchronised swimmer. For school, she’s written about her favourite place.

Underwater.. A magical kingdom for you and me.
Underwater... A secret submerged playground below a shimmering sunlit layer of light.
Underwater... A clear open space to roam free.
Underwater... Dancing in happiness, a creative theatre to make up routines.
In the water... Making exhausting exercise funner than ever.
Underwater... Racing free in water I love, like a dove flying high.
Underwater... Swoosh.

(I liked her use of ‘funner’ as comparative for fun. She insisted it was more fun! So true!)

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    Drew Martyn 3 months ago

    10?
    TEN years old?????
    Her vocabulary, and more importantly, her choice of words seems to be naturally poetic, the shimmering sunlit layer, the creative theatre, just amazing. The format is very interesting and clever, for me visually reflecting the two different worlds of above and underwater. She's a natural poet, Neville, she should write more :) (there's a bell ringing... didn't you post something she'd written a while ago that was pretty eye-catching?)

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    Neville Hunt 3 months ago

    Thanks Drew. She’s a bright girl and I was so impressed with her mature use of language, rhetorical devices and the structure too. I think I wrote about her synchronised swimming after we’d watched her and her team come an impressive 15th out of 24 in the national championships at the Olympic swimming pool. I might have posted some written work too. I have time right now to check that out! I am certain she will write more as she has bags of self-motivation.

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    Christopher 3 months ago

    Well, if the swimming doesn't work out she certainly could move on to creative writing.

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    Neville Hunt 3 months ago

    Thanks Christopher. I think she plans to continue with both. We had an online creative brainstorming again today. I struggled to keep up with her!

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    Frenchie 3 months ago

    I just melted.... so sweet <3 We have a young writer in the making. I wonder if writing runs in the family? hmmm...but then again, she is a synchronised swimmer...

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    Neville Hunt 3 months ago

    Thanks Frenchie. I think she might be a natural.... at both. ✍️ 🏊‍♀️

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    shaun 3 months ago

    Beautiful. But I wonder at what age she will be when others rob her of her voice. Well it won't happen on here!

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