nevillehunt avatar

Fedeltà #5

by

Tony Monelli had an instinct for things… like survival. In the instant his finger accepted Terry’s call, he sensed imminent danger. He dropped straight to the floor, face down, covering head with hands. That instinct saved his life and his hearing.

Above him was a loud explosion as the coffin seemed to disintegrate, although Tony couldn’t see it. The block on which the coffin was laid was strong and the blast went upwards and outwards, killing instantly the priest and four mourners in the first rows, throwing many others backwards.

Tony’s injuries were severe, but not fatal.

Unluckily for someone.

5 comments add one below

  • avatar

    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    So there we are, with 5 'episodes' posted, I'm now committed to a story as short or long as I'm able to make it (and get away with it). I'm respectfully adopting the Christopher Method of Narrative, that of letting the story take me where it wants to go (but I'm not convinced about it Christopher - I'm sure that there's more than a little forward-planning to Jake Randolph). I hope ideas will spring up so I don't lose momentum, and I hope I will have the stamina to build some critical mass and, hopefully, entertain....

  • avatar

    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    ...But right now I haven't thought beyond these five drabbles, and that's the excitement, and fear which I'm hoping will stimulate adrenalin. Any directional suggestions along the way will be welcome and may shape the progress and outcome. Feel free to help co-create. Thanks.

  • avatar

    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    ...But right now I haven't thought beyond these five drabbles, and that's the excitement, and fear which I'm hoping will stimulate adrenalin. Any directional suggestions along the way will be welcome and may shape the progress and outcome. Feel free to help co-create. Thanks.

  • avatar

    Christopher about 1 year ago

    I'm sure you'll create a story that's suspenseful and entertaining. Looking forward to it.

    As far as Jake goes, I get an idea for a story but I don't plan it all out. Milton Dunn was not Jake's childhood friend when I conceived the new story. That developed literally as I was typing. I didn't know who killed Paige Turner when I conceived the story (although I think I know now, even though I haven't gotten that far in the writing yet.)

    But anxiety and fear are great motivators when it comes to posting these stories before you've finished them.

  • avatar

    Drew Martyn about 1 year ago

    Yes, I agree with Christopher, the fear of stalling is a great motivator. Neville, I'm certain you won't get writers block and you certainly won't end up writing something that's boring, so go with it. I know that just because it's superb so far doesn't mean it's all going to be equally as superb, but it's a damn good indicator that it will. tbh I can't wait to read more :)

Join the conversation

Sign up or Sign in to leave a comment on this drabble.