Use it, don't lose it
John and me played hooky from school down at Stutton Point. John had nicked his dad’s air rifle. He was kinda crazy, so when we spotted the unexploded Jerry bomb sticking above the water, he thought we’d see if we could set it off. He started firing pellets.
John was a rubbish shot. We started laughing. The more we laughed, the worse shot he was. I told him not to get too close but he was determined to blow it up. Eventually he succeeded, still laughing. You might say he laughed his head off. You might. I can’t. No more.
- Category: General / Misc
- Tags: Constable Country Stour Estuary Stutton Point
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Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
5 months ago D.M. set me a challenge to rewrite an earlier drabble, No More Lessons, from a different pov. Finally, I've got round to it. Thanks D.M. for the challenge. It's now for you to judge...or throw down another such challenge.
The action takes place on the beautiful and extremely tidal Stour estuary in Suffolk, England where my bro-in-law lives. It's fiction though.
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Chris Walker over 8 years ago
Good one, Neville.
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Christopher over 8 years ago
Really great, Neville. Even better than the original. It's amazing what shifting the perspective can do for the story.
Well done for suggesting it, D.M.! It might be interesting for us all to pick a story we've done and change the perspective. Certainly something to think about.
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Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
Thanks Chris, Drew and Christopher. It was a good exercise requiring a complete rethink. As you have indicated, Christopher, it would be interesting to rework our earlier stories. I'm thinking of writing a series of the same basic story from a number of perspectives. That could be interesting drabbling.
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Christopher over 8 years ago
I'd be very interested in reading that, Neville. So, get writing, my good man!
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D.M. over 8 years ago
Good one!
This is more personal than the original which sounded like a travelogue blurb.
The horror of that sight would be traumatic. Perhaps he can add the humor years later on recounting it. I am intrigued by a series, having read so many fine ones here. I am flattered that you considered my suggestion, Neville.
