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Bubbles enjoying the warm autumn sun and golden colours on the last day before lock down.
Ducks on the boating lake, totally unaware.
What difference did it make to their routine of preening and squabbling for some little toddlers lump of bread?
Old folk taking the benches and having a smoke.
"Lovely day,"
"Yes, That why I've come out. Last chance for a bit!"
"Shall we get fish and chips?"
Passing by I get snippets of conversation.
I don't know what she was thinking of - just fancy"
A couple of forty somethings pass by,
".......and she's got great tits now!"

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    Jamie Clapperton about 1 year ago

    Second reading of this has given a bit of autumn Park sunshine and a giggle although I'm at dark rainy bus stop. Enjoyed.

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    Great stuff Marion. I love the way you’ve earwigged on those conversations, each of which allows/forces the reader to imagine back stories... making the drabble punch above its word count weight. As a bloke, naturally I’m glad that the forty somethings came last... more time to let my imagination fly!😊

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    Marion E Ball about 1 year ago

    As a female, I'd love to know what 'she' did to have such a transformation!

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    I must admit, Marion, I had wondered first of all whether she had just been very young and had matured, but then thinking about timelines and the fact that these were the utterings of forty somethings, and making the untold assumption that these were men, I felt that was most improper of them to consider her in that way. So then I assumed that she’d probably been surgically enhanced. And that’s why your drabble is so good... a pint that thinks it’s a quart and readers that think beyond the confines of strict word count.

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    Marion E Ball about 1 year ago

    Whilst killing time between appointments, I took a stroll round our local park and then I wrote this just as it happened . By sheer chance it contained just 100 words so I altered nothing. All true. You flatter me. I can't write clever ones like you.

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    Marion E Ball about 1 year ago

    P.S. They were women!!

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    Gulp! 🤭 Well, by chance and good fortune you seem to have stumbled upon a little gem! I have had many years experience writing drabbles on this site, but it’s a bit of a struggle right now for me and many others. Strange, when we should have time on our hands 🥴 Please keep posting...

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    Drew Martyn about 1 year ago

    This is a beautifully crafted insight into a few moments, nice one Marion. :)

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    Rachel Bee about 1 year ago

    Fabulous drabble! (note to self...must earwig more earnestly in future)

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    Marion E Ball about 1 year ago

    Thank you Drew for your encouragement.

    Thank you daughter, waiting for your next one!!!

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    Daughter? Interesting!

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