Let’s walk, she said stepping underneath my umbrella.
No handshake or hug. No smile.
A twinge of regret entered my mind.
Then we started down the rain-covered cobblestones.
Subtle composition of ambergris and labdanum in the air. And silence.
As we reached City Hall Square, I thought of ways to escape.
She stepped in front of me.
Do you like theater? She said.
Very much, I said.
I have tickets for Caligula at the Royal Theater, she said.
Camus on a first date? I said.
With you? Absolutely, she said, leaned forward and kissed me lightly on the lips.
Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
I love it. I can feel the atmosphere, smell the perfume. Very well written, Thomas.
D.M. over 8 years ago
I vaguely remembered it, too. This is more subtle. Her actions, stepping under the umbrella, stepping in front of him. She is very direct and it works. Letting the
reader react.
T. Willemann over 8 years ago
Thanks for your comments!
D.M. your remark made me wonder if I should have used _under_ rather than _underneath_ in the first sentence.
D.M. over 8 years ago
Either works. I play the same game in my writing head.