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Aster

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(The alarm wails)
She calls,
'V get up!!'
Can't be late! The sheets play merry go-round and a dramatic fall!!
'V you and your Chaplin routine, you're such a mess!'

I head off with the checklist
I double-check, else she will haunt me
Coffee, Flowers, Candy Floss, Salt Treats- Check

A bottle? Nah! I'll be the only drunkard at the end.

She was waiting there for me, she always is...
I finally join her on our spot and hand the bouquet of asters, the vivid colors filling my eyes, savoring her sweet jasmine scent that plagues my mind.

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    Neville Hunt 6 months ago

    Seems like more homework of a cryptic nature for a bear of little brain like me!

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    VerityAlways 6 months ago

    Neville, it's written by a pea brain!!
    I am trying to write long or connected drabbles. But after the last series, I may not keep readers engaged till the end. How did I fare in this?
    Would love to know if there is any room for improvement?

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    VerityAlways 6 months ago

    Thanks for reading and voting, Neville!

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    Christopher 5 months ago

    I haven't read the other two but at first read my impression was heading off to put flowers on someone's grave. It will be interesting to see if I've gotten the wrong end of the stick.

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    VerityAlways 5 months ago

    Thanks, Christopher! I hate that my writing is so obvious. I meant it to unveil only at the third drabble. More homework now!

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    Christopher 5 months ago

    It's not obvious at all. That was just a vague impression upon first reading. And we at Drablr are known for misdirection, so you can't always take first impressions at face value anyway.

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    Neville Hunt 5 months ago

    Agreed!

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    VerityAlways 5 months ago

    Thank you both. I'll take your word, but no more training wheels, okay? I would love honest opinions, please!!

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    Christopher 5 months ago

    I always give honest opinions, even when Neville and I are trying to outdo each other with puns!

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    VerityAlways 5 months ago

    Thank you, Christopher! I really look up to the feedback.

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