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“Father?”
A child’s quavering treble, thin and delicate as a butterfly’s leg.
He’d hoped to be finished before she woke. No help for it. He kept working.
“Father?” A hint of tears, a faint breath of salt on the air.
He gritted his teeth and kept working.
“Please father.” A brittle, exhausted wail.
“Shut up.” He had meant to keep silent. Nothing could be gained by talking to her. But she always broke him.
Nearly done now.
“You can’t keep me here forever.” Nothing childish in the voice now.
“Maybe.” He stuffed the last brick in to place. “We’ll see.”

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    Richard Charles Davidson over 9 years ago

    Ain't nothing wrong with part 3! :)

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    Rodindeadpan over 9 years ago

    Nothing wrong but the sadness it invokes in me. That poor bedeviled, beheading, becursed, bereaved little girl.

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    Jonathan Mills over 9 years ago

    It's true, there's an element of sympathy because the story's about a child. I had the same thing watching The Ring if I'm totally honest, small, cuddly child pitched down a well. I think that's what made the idea as powerful as it was with Ringu and the remake. Hopefully I can tap in to that a bit. Thanks for reading.

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