Star Child (part 2)
“You restrained her?”
“Yes, doctor.” The mother’s eyes were tight with strain, numb with fear. “She’s bedevilled.”
Doctor Harper had a fleeting glance of bare stone walls, the heavy door, bars on the windows – then his eye fell to the child tied to the bed.
She lay still, impassive. She was a china figurine, serenely beautiful, a hideous contrast to the heavy straps at wrist and ankle.
“You monsters!” he raged. “I’ll see you jailed for this!” He leant forward, reaching for her bonds.
Her head snapped forward, jaw yawning impossibly, shark’s teeth bared. His body fell, lifeless.
Headless.
- Category: Horror, Chillers & Ghost Stories
- Tags: Star Child, Lovecraftian
8 comments add one below
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Rodindeadpan over 9 years ago
Good drabble. She must be going through her terrible twos. She'll grow out of it.
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Jonathan Mills over 9 years ago
No she wont. *sinister music* Thanks.
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Richard Charles Davidson over 9 years ago
Jonathan, these 2 drabbles are especially good. Really enjoying them, and looking forward to more. One minor critique, if you will indulge me. The last sentence "His face was gone" could use some adjustment. I found it out of place. Perhaps a quick edit. Something more immediately devastating. The way it is, it reads too passive. Excelleent so far. Keep it up!
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Richard Charles Davidson over 9 years ago
...as I spell 'excellent' wrong. :)
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Jonathan Mills over 9 years ago
Thanks Richard. I tend to come up against the word barrier pretty quickly with description, so generally have to cut things back to a bare minimum. With violence, I like to keep things sudden and sharp, so it doesn't slow the action down (if there is any). I'll have a think and see if I can come up with a better ending.
FYI part 3 is now up too. -
Jonathan Mills over 9 years ago
OK tweaked the end a little, hopefully it fits better. Let me know what you think.
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Richard Charles Davidson over 9 years ago
Bam! Brilliant!
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Rodindeadpan over 9 years ago
Headless!!! WTF!!! Maybe she won't grow out of it. Or maybe she just needs a teething toy.
