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what i saw

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They told us to go home. The shift wasn't over yet and it was almost break time. We all knew what had happened and when the ambulance came, we
thought it would leave empty. Instead, they took Lewis, who drove the jitney. Not really his fault but, even from a distance, you could see he wasn't himself, slumped and white as a sheet of paper. He had seen
what happened but there was nothing anyone could do after that. The bin was too heavy, like a boot coming down on an ant. Nothing left. No name released, but we knew.

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    Elizabeth O. Smith almost 8 years ago

    Eerie drabble. I like the choppy syntax and the sense of the unknown throughout. I'm a little confused by the ending though...

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    D.M. almost 8 years ago

    Thank you, as always, for your feedback. I will work on it some more. It was a workplace accident, and a bin crushed a worker. Sometimes what I think is clear,
    in my mind at least, doesn't transfer to the page. I appreciate readers like you!

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    Horrorshow almost 8 years ago

    I like it. Very good indeed.

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