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The Littlest Client #87

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"May I have your full name, Miss?" Harrigan asked as he pulled the same pad on which he'd written down the address of Dolan's car that I yelled to him.

"Barbara Louise Bennett," she said. Her hair was pulled back into a ponytail and she didn't have any make up on and I was starting to think that she wasn't so plain after all.

"Well, Miss Bennett, I need to ask you a few questions. It shouldn't take long," Harrigan said. She looked at me as if she needed my permission so I just nodded at her.

"Okay," she said...

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    Christopher about 1 month ago

    I hate to leave it here but I need to slow up a bit to make it to this weekend when I can write some more.

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    Neville Hunt about 1 month ago

    No worries, Christopher. It gives me time to imagine what Barbara looks like...

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    Christopher about 1 month ago

    I hate it when I read a book and they give you descriptions down to the last minute detail. So I give just enough to details to let your imagination do the rest. I also like, if it's a character that runs through the whole story, to spread the description out throughout the story.

    I tried reading Nathaniel Hawthorne's House Of The Seven Gables and after about the eighth page where he was still describing the front of that house I put it down and never went back to it.

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    Neville Hunt about 1 month ago

    Corrine, my wife, is my toughest critic. She has frequently criticised me for too much descriptive text... and she’s always right! It’s really good to have an honest critic I find. I like to use my imagination, and, being lazy, When I write stories now, I know myself what the character is like, but I can’t be arsed to give too much detail!

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    Christopher about 1 month ago

    Yeah, I think it's best to sketch out the description and let the reader paint the portrait, as pretentious as that sounds.

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