I swung the baseball bat, hitting him across his back and neck so hard that his ancestors in the Old Country felt it. He dropped like the Stock Exchange on Black Tuesday. His companion turned in shock as I flipped the bat sideways under his chin, pushing him back against the wall.
"Hi," I said jovially. "What's a guy like you doing in an alley like this?"
He made sad choking noises until I eased the pressure from the bat.
"Do you know who you're mucking with, pallie?"
I shook my head. "That's what I aim to find out, chum."
Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
Love the action and the wonderful simile. Your ability to maintain interest with your use of language and metaphor is excellent. You haven't dropped the ball yet. Thanks.
Neville Hunt over 8 years ago
What's great about the Drabble format is that it's easy to pick up on the previous action/narrative. It's time I tried the rolling story but your's will be a very tough act to follow.
D.M. over 8 years ago
'Love that dialogue!
(Neville's right. This is very addictive, and also inspiring. You've got a few of us hooked! I say, "Go for it, Neville!")
Christopher over 8 years ago
Wow! Thank you both so much. I had no idea what I was doing when I signed up for this, and your support and encouragement has been invaluable to me.
Christopher over 8 years ago
And, Neville, I agree with D.M., "Go for it!" It would be very interesting to see how a continuing story would develop under your tutelage.