rodindeadpan avatar

Charlie and Jack


"Sure is quiet," Charlie said.
They stopped and listened. It was quiet. Not an insect buzzed, not a bird chirped, not even a leaf rustled. Never has such a peaceful and serene moment ever been so absolutely filled with terror. The boys were taking tiny steps while leaning onto each other. Both were expecting the unexpected.
"What is there to be scared of," Jack asked.
"I don't know but I sure am scared of it," Charlie replied.
Still they went on.
After what seemed liked the rest of eternity but was really only like three minutes and nineteen seconds....nothing happened.

4 comments add one below

  • avatar

    Josh Peters over 5 years ago

    Interesting. I nearly skipped by this one due to the misspelled "quiet" in the first sentence.

  • avatar

    Rodindeadpan over 5 years ago

    You are quite right. Thank You Josh.

  • avatar

    Horrorshow over 5 years ago

    I laughed at the end. Hitchcock would have been proud of the sense of suspense you imbued in this one, Rodindeadpan!

  • avatar

    Bryan Thomas over 5 years ago

    Loved that ending!

Join the conversation

Sign up or Sign in to leave a comment on this drabble.