“You’re really scaring me now George. I’m off. I’m very sorry… Hey, let go of my arm, that hurts. You’re scaring muuuu.”
“It is scary, isn’t it Alice, really scary… knowing that you’re dying? You might have a chance though, because if you’re really lucky someone will stop me before I’ve finished strangling you, but you never know, do you? Maybe time won’t be on your side Alice, like it isn’t on mine and it hasn’t been for the eleven years, three months and twelve days it’s taken me to track you down, and since everything died for m…
...OOOFFF!”
Neville Hunt almost 5 years ago
This was my response to a little exercise our writers group did in writing tight dialogue. It gets really tight at the end...
Christopher almost 5 years ago
Man, I wasn't expecting that! Really great, Neville. I used to have a book that had all kinds of writing challenges in it. The 5-part series I posted about Wile E. Coyote was written by me years ago in response to one of the challenges in that book.
Neville Hunt almost 5 years ago
Thanks Christopher. It was meant to teach us to make sure dialogue doesn’t get bogged down with conversational niceties. It needs to move on fast or risk losing/boring the reader.
Christopher almost 5 years ago
It definitely got to the point quickly. Writing drabbles really taught me the art of word conservation and being concise.