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"There's no way you're going to sway the masses with this crap. Write a better opening sentence."

Amilanu stared at his editor, hammer and chisel in hand, feeling deflated as his hard work was rejected. "But I worked on that slab for a whole week," he protested.

"I don't care if it took you a whole month. If you want this to be a best seller, you're going to have to do better than this."

Amilanu wheeled his draft back to his place and began working on the next draft: "In the beginning God created the heaven and the earth."

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    Neville Hunt about 5 years ago

    Love it, Michael. Such a great drabble concept.
    Let's hope he didn't end up with a chip on his shoulder!

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    D.M. about 5 years ago

    the opening sentence is EVERYTHING! Thanks for the reminder!

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    Alex Munro about 5 years ago

    Wonderful and witty. Brilliant idea, well executed.

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