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He wanted them to feel him. Wanted them to see him.
He touched his mother's and his father's hand.
He whispered, "I'm still here, I'm STILL HERE!"
His mother and father looked at their little boy, lying there in the coffin... stone cold.
He begged them to see him. He still needed them.
~x~
"Do you think... he's in a better place...?" his mother asked years later. The two elders sat there, watching the fire crackle.
"I don't know..."
He looked at them... still there...hidden forever.
But he would not leave them. He would always need his momma and papa.

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    More from the darker side Aishling. Just up Drew’s strasse!

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    Drew Martyn about 1 year ago

    Yes, indeed, I can't say how much I love this - apart from to say I've re-read this six (I think) times in a row and thoroughly enjoyed it.
    I even have to admit it bought a bit of a lump to my throat :)
    I also love the visual effect of the ~x~ for the scene change, it just ties in so well with the subject. And that last line... wow :)
    So yeah, Neville's right :)

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    Neville Hunt about 1 year ago

    I too like the scene change ~x~. A worthy sacrifice of a word and more wordcount-effective than the alternative.

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