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Roylsden #377

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A desert sun sets behind the numerous tall buildings that jut upwards like dead men's fingers out of the red dust. Perhaps befitting dead men, it's not them that point accusingly at us. They point at the good, wholesome blue sky. No sirree, it's the sharp jet-black tarmac roads snaking accusingly and arterially along the ground pointing towards the bloating heart of Roylsden. Towards us.
The canyon has gone. The river's being concreted over.
New buildings erected.
Six thousand offices. For greed.
One school. For Knowledge and Wonder.
And Understanding.
That is Roylsden. Remote. Insecure. Pointed at. Accused.
Home.

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    Drew Martyn 7 months ago

    Well, that's it. Personally, I'll miss ol' Anna, but I'll be glad to get back to some single drabbles ;) Thank you to everyone who've stayed with it, like Topsy it just growed and growed. Maybe one day I'll try to bring it under control a bit. Or maybe I'll just let it be what it be. Thanks for reading, and, above everything else, I hope you enjoyed it.

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    Drew Martyn 7 months ago

    Also, a special Thanks to Neville, who has somehow found the stamina to stay with this throughout, and even more amazingly has commented on probably 95% of them. Cheers dude, thanks for your support and encouragement :)

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    Jeff Taylor 7 months ago

    Drew, and when will your epic (And let's face it, it is) be published? You need to assemble it and publish it as a flash-fiction book now 😊

    Well done dude. Congrats and respect!

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    Neville Hunt 7 months ago

    Thank you Drew for both story and comment above. I have enjoyed this story right from the off to the end. You have drawn me in and never failed to keep me engaged with both story and writing style. The way you have constructed and communicated this tale is masterly... although I have come to expect no less from you. At close to 38,000 words, you really should consider publishing this as a novella... possibly using something like Createspace. An excellent read throughout. Thanks a lot.

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    Christopher 7 months ago

    This was absolutely fantastic, Drew. Combining a traditional Western with existential and surreal elements was truly inspired. This place has some real talent, and both you and Neville should be published authors on the bestsellers list.

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    Drew Martyn 6 months ago

    Thank you very much guys, that's awesome. I realy should spend some time sorting out the publishing side, but I just love the writing too much. Maybe one day... Thanks again for the comments and for sticking with it guys, really appreciated :)

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