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"Zeke knows," Mr Bowen confided. "For his sake, admit you killed- "
The shoulder of the axe and the back of its blade hit Mr Bowen on the side of the head, knocking him to the floor.
He saw close up Mrs McGinley's shoes peering from under the muddy hem of her long dress, then the pain hit.
The axe blade came down on his shoulder and an agony of red flashed over him. A dull thud between his shoulders blades exploded into sharp agony as Lucy McGinley struggled with the handle to release the spattered blade from his back.

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    Neville Hunt 10 months ago

    Oops! That’s nightmares for me tonight! Pow-er-ful stuff. Think I’ll leave my logs unchopped for a while...

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    Neville Hunt 10 months ago

    The back story for Lucy McGinley has provided a perfect context for who she is and what she’s done or more particularly how on Earth she could do it. And done so very economically. Very skilfully done sir!

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    Drew Martyn 10 months ago

    Thanks Neville. I felt she needed a bit of making-more-real (there must be a word for that, but I can't think of it atm) and I also wanted to show some of the events of the story from a different perspective (but again a little like Anna Cody, from the perspective of someone who, until she really takes matters into her own hands, has no real power over the events which happen)

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    Neville Hunt 10 months ago

    Possibly ‘enrealising’, which, if it doesn’t exist as a word in the OED, should be a candidate... but I feel in me bones that a better one is put there somewhere.

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    Drew Martyn 10 months ago

    Good word, if it doesn't exist it should!

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