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Roylsden #48

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My mind raced.
Anyone see you there? I asked.
"His neck - it..." He turned and puked again.
Did anyone see you there? I repeated, This is important, Clint.
He wiped his forearm across his mouth. The smell of the vomit was acrid.
"His arm was nearly off! Oh God, Anna, his neck..." again he puked, but this time didn't move, just let it tumble down his front.
I grabbed his arms, one dry, one sticky and wet, and shook him hard.
Listen to me Clint. Anyone see you?
He shook his head. "Dunno. I ran away. I don't think so!"

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    Neville Hunt over 1 year ago

    Highly intriguing. A great place to leave it... for now. A fabulous sextet Drew.

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    Neville Hunt over 1 year ago

    Oh dear... in an earlier comment I urged Anna to take Bowen down. I think she might’ve done as I suggested. Sorry mate! 😟

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    Drew Martyn over 1 year ago

    Lol, no worries. Neither of us have control over what Anna does, she's such a free spirit!
    Thanks for all your comments and all your support Neville :)

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    Neville Hunt over 1 year ago

    Votes are good, but comments let you know to what extent people are reading and enjoying one’s stuff! (It’s a lonely life as a writer without any feedback, positive or negative...the latter encouraging you to improve! There, that’s the most academic I really am!👨🏻‍🎓

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    Drew Martyn over 1 year ago

    Haha, academic and true! :)

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    Neville Hunt over 1 year ago

    My next story (don’t worry, Fedelta still has quite a way to go yet!) is almost written as a short story. I just have to complete it and then I will drabblify it. It may not go down well here as it’s relatively soft and may not have the drabble by drabble drama one needs for each nano-chapter. But I will do my best and test market it. It is more typical of my output but I’m getting to like these evil characters, so maybe my style will change to more hard-hitting stuff! 🤔

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    Drew Martyn over 1 year ago

    That sounds interesting Neville, I'll look forward to that.
    I actually think you have a real gift for making everyday "normal" or "usual" happenings interesting, or giving them an edge or a viewpoint that maybe isn't always obvious. Therefore, I have no worries atall about your drabbles lacking impact :)
    Also very happy that Fedelta still has a way to run!
    btw where's Steve these days, I'm not used to him disappearing for a week lol! ;)

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    Neville Hunt over 1 year ago

    Thanks Drew; I’ll do me best!
    Steve was complaining just the other day that there were a dearth of posts, so I posted a quick drabble. He may be away for a week or so out of Internet connection (mean git), but he seems to be loving it so he’ll be back!

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    Steve McBrevity over 1 year ago

    Hi guys - still alive and kicking and enjoying your dramas both bubbling with intriguing expectation. You’ve given me so much to absorb I’ve not had time to address my next drablr in my travelogue which was a quite harrowing episode at the time!

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