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TopFloor people see everything. That makes them fine, intelligent, good people.

People down here, they’re different.

TopFloor people tell us SouthWinger people are evil and EastWingers plan annexing our hallway. Those SouthWingers are told we eat children. NorthWingers believe we're thugs.

Topfloorers say, be happy with what we’ve got because we could be Basement People.

But come closer. Listen.
It's bollocks.
TopFloorers want us fighting amongst ourselves because then we won’t fight them.

And now TopFloorers blocked the staircases. They don’t want us climbing up, sharing their views.

TopFloor people see everything. That's what makes them fearful.
And us strong.

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    Jonathan Royan over 4 years ago

    Really smart drabble. :-) voted!

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    Jim M over 4 years ago

    One of the best drabbles I've ever read. The repetition, pace and structure suit it perfectly- it's warm and easy to read but with the depth of a fable and the backbone of a cautionary tale

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    Jim M over 4 years ago

    Sorry for gushing Drew, this is just too good

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    Drew Martyn over 4 years ago

    Thank you everyone, such positive comments and as always very much appreciated.

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    Rodindeadpan over 4 years ago

    Jim M's opinion about this drabble is more fact than not. Nice work.

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    Johnny Wishbone over 4 years ago

    Oooh. Allegory. Very impressive. I would love to be able to write like this. This has got to be a 'Drabble of the Month' contender. Or some other period of time. I don't mind which.

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    Drew Martyn over 4 years ago

    Thanks guys, very kind.

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