/Motion. This way/That. Darting. Rapid-Move: quick. Dart/Dash. From shadows. Swift in light, flash movements, jog to steal/ to pocket/ to sprint. Return. Back to shadows./
I’d been beaten by the city. The City tried to hammer me into shape, but I was too rebellious, so in the end it just hammered me. And that’s where they found me, these angels, in a doorway, so cold I couldn’t stand.
Warehouse-warmed. Restored. /Wildcats, they prowl/. Perfect. Teach me your beauty.
I’m faster now. In/Out. Go/Get. Retrieve. All actions by reflex. /Like thought/ Flash. Return. Back to shadows.
I'm learning. Slowly.
Horrorshow over 6 years ago
I love the sense we get here of rapid electrical / chemical signals bouncing around the narrator's brain! Extremely well constructed drabble with a very exciting feel to it.
Drew Martyn over 6 years ago
Well pleased you enjoyed it Horrorshow. I'm amazed how you get to the underlying focus (nub? gist?) of everyones drabbles in your comments.
Horrorshow over 6 years ago
That's a very nice thing to say, Drew! Tbh, I'm usually rubbish at interpreting meanings from prose and poetry. I attribute that to not being very bright! I have followed your word very closely for several months though so perhaps I have a decent handle on your wonderful writing and the interesting themes you explore.
Horrorshow over 6 years ago
Oops - word should read work! Wish we could edit these blasted comments at times!
Jim M over 6 years ago
Everything Mr Horrorshow said. Plus I like the distribution of options between statements.dizzying but exhilarating