Let’s walk, she said stepping underneath my umbrella.
No handshake or hug. No smile.
A twinge of regret entered my mind.
Then we started down the rain-covered cobblestones.
Subtle composition of ambergris and labdanum in the air. And silence.
As we reached City Hall Square, I thought of ways to escape.
She stepped in front of me.
Do you like theater? She said.
Very much, I said.
I have tickets for Caligula at the Royal Theater, she said.
Camus on a first date? I said.
With you? Absolutely, she said, leaned forward and kissed me lightly on the lips.
Neville Hunt about 4 years ago
I love it. I can feel the atmosphere, smell the perfume. Very well written, Thomas.
Drew Martyn about 4 years ago
I couldn't remember where this came from so went back to read "Grasping". That was good, this is even better. I like this girl, Camus on a first date would have thrown me, too, but that's a good thing! Nicely written and the thrill and excitement come through very well.
D.M. about 4 years ago
I vaguely remembered it, too. This is more subtle. Her actions, stepping under the umbrella, stepping in front of him. She is very direct and it works. Letting the
reader react.
Thomas Andersen about 4 years ago
Thanks for your comments!
D.M. your remark made me wonder if I should have used _under_ rather than _underneath_ in the first sentence.
D.M. about 4 years ago
Either works. I play the same game in my writing head.